Hi there ,
This is my first entry . I know it 's a bit late but any way happy new year . I wish you all a happy new year 1387 . I wana to publish some photo of my new year holiday to sanandaj . hope to like them .All of them belongs to two old house in sanadaj . they were very beautiful and picturecs . here you are :( sorry all of photo appeared at the top of the page )
Bye until the next time
3th Ordibehest ( 22 th April )
3th Ordibehest ( 22 th April )
Pary
17 comments:
Hi pary.
congratulation for you webloge.
The pictures are realy enjoyable.
I hope to you hade a good trip in your holiday.
I'm waiting to your new post.
your freind bahar
so very active of you to create a blog in blogspot. I fill blesssed becuase of having such a students like you
AND wonderful photos Pary! thank you very persuasive too. we have some very nice friends in Sanandaj seeing these photos makes me to think of paying a visit there.
Hi parisa!Isaw your beautiful pictures,they seem to be ancient buildings like museum.thankyou for your kindness and your coorperation whit me at ceratting my blog!
bye
homa
Hi Parisa
The most active person in our blogs!
How’s it going? Every page I open I see your comments! Here Pary, there Pary, every where Pary!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
However I like you and enjoy reading your comments. About Nansy: I was thinking about everybody except Nas….. Thank you for your guidance! I’ll post other beautiful photos just for you and Hooman!
See you later
Homa
Hi Parisa!your place was really empty in class yesterday!I read yours after class,thank you for
informatiom
about our class's program and homeworks.however I had done nothing for class.I have many unread pages of my both books. I should take myself to class's level! of course I have started the story and.........
see you
Homa
Hi Parisa!what's up?I missed you where are you?When you aren't in class it's too silent!I found the page of teacher's blog and studied a little, nevertheless i'm interested to join it if they accept me!please help me what should i do?thank you alot and hope to see you
Homa
what on earth has happened to your blog Pary!?!?!?!?!?!??!
you sohuldn't have removed the other useful links pary, students in other classes liked them too.
please put the links back please thank you
çheers
Hi Pary
Hope everything is fine with your lovely little boy and you have a bit of time to relax.
My feedback on your writing
Beautiful writing, very professional, nice start, and nice body. Wide range of vocab, well done, do the following minor changes in organization and it will become even lovelier (do it and post it again in your own blog, you will feel the difference yourself) .
1. Your second paragraph is a bit too long, make it to paragraphs
2. and form hope to.... start your conclusion and add more sentences, you can suggest something or summarize your body. and try not to use ‘I’ in assay writing.
Pary's writing on technology
I think no one has any doubt that new technology has made our life easier in many ways. At first think about arduous daily chores inside our homes. How it has been changed since three or four past decades ! Who could imagine to use facilities and appliances such as washing machine , vacuum cleaner , meat grinder , food processor , fruit juice maker , TV , radio , telephone and so on inside their own home ! Technology has gone further just in the past ten years and some new facilities and services such as dishwasher, microwave oven , cell phone , computer , internet , satellite and etc have been introduced to our life . Now in spite of terrible economic state most middle class families enjoy having these modern items in their every day life .And who knows how our life would be like in a few decades later?
Although, our life has been made easier under the power of new modern technology it has had some destructive influences in our life. I think in the past time people were so happier with their simple life . The relation ship (one word) between relatives and friends were so stronger than now . I still regret my childhood time , how much I enjoyed playing with my cousins in my granny’s big yard . ( There were ten of us there , some times ! ) . Now families population is by far less due to bad economic states and some other parameter such as having no time for bringing up kids . Nowadays children go crazy with varied seductive computer games and youth are busy with different Internet services . They are not familiar with friendship as we used to in the past time . On the other hand I think as a modern nation we have forgotten some life simple beauty and joyance , Such as enjoyment of (enjoying) listening to a bird song in the countryside , the beauty of sun set , song of sea waves , the beauty of seasons , … . we might visit countryside regularly but our mind is so much invented ( are you saying invaded= occupied?? ) by modern life stresses and tensions that we can't (don’t use contractions in your formal writing) enjoy our sightseeing as we had in the past time . Hope to can (have the ability to, or be able to, or take the plunge and) go against the flow and make our life more beautiful and enjoyable.
Have a nice day and bye
Pary
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Your letter
Excellent, good luck
Hi dear Jhon and Jesica ,
I 'm writing to thank you very much for looking after me so well during my visit in London . I particularly appreciated to put me up in your own home . All of you were so kind to me . You are lucky to have such lovely and cute kids. I had a great holiday and it cheered me up. I (was, or became) specially delighted with visiting London (‘) fabulous art museums . I 'm happy to know more about life in the UK . And finally thanks for seeing me off at the airport in spite of having loads to do in your work . I 'm waiting to see you and kids in your trip in next new year holiday . Until then with best wishes .
Love
Aunti Ann
Second article
Internet
Beautiful article but long paras ( for IELTS and TOEFL I mean) I have put * where you may consider breaking your para.
and try not to use (you) in your writing (too informal and friendly) change to ‘ we’, or ‘one’
The Net ! The cyber, the virtual Space !The first thing that comes to my mind is revolution , huge change , big bang ! It 's obvious that it has changed our world in many ways . It has broken the barriers . You are not alone . You can be in touch with different people with various culture all around the world . Now , the distance is not important . You can make friends easily . You can express your ideas freely :) , even you can hid (hide) your identity . *** The science frontiers has been removed and knowledge is not just for special people . You can access every kind of information which you need , easily . When you want to do a research , thousands of resources are available . Economics , transportation , medicine , entertainment , advertisement and communication and etc has been changed incredibly . **** Some old traditional concepts has (have) been (not necessary)lost their meaning . For instance , now with different news agency sites , it 's meaningless to spend money for buying papers , although some people still like buying newspapers and reading it in their cozy sofa with a cup of tea .
(good contrast here) However Internet has introduced many bad concepts , such as spams , hacking and identity theft and so on . Internet has been influencing young people specially teenagers in a really bad way . You know (very informal) it has been a big problem in most of families . they spend lots of their precious time in chat rooms , different Blogs , different destructive immoral sites , every day . These are all some bad effects of Internet .
All of us can hear about hacking of big companies , military headquarters , governmental departments computer network illegally by some non professional people , time to time . Spam emails might bother you and deceive you in many way(s) . Even some of them might pollute your computer system with dangerous viruses .
So for final word I think , we shouldn't use computer blindly and we have to be aware of this virtual space dangers and try to increase our computer knowledge every day
and final word
corrections are in brackets
read them and if you have a question about any of them or if something doesn't make sense, leave a comment in our blog and I'll get back to you, thanks for putting back the links
cheers
Hi my dear!
At first I apologize because of my late congratulation! I am sure that you understand me and you know that how busy am I??????????????
(Being famous has got these kinds of problems!!!!) I am sure that you didn’t think that I am a selfish girl! Yes or no?!?
But my friend I confess that your blog is very nice and interesting! That is clear, the famous person as me should have these kinds of active and beautiful friends!
Now I am not kidding, you are very nice friend! I am proud about it!!!!!!
Hi dear Fatima ,
At first do you know i love your name as Fatima , Who called you as Fatima for the first time ? was it one of our teachers ? ( I can think about one of them , do you know who ? ) .And thanks for your compliment . Actually i have published two more Blog before and i deleted it by mistake :(
Any way thanks for your comment it made my day . And i 'm looking to see your own Blog , as a most famous girl ( does it satisfy you, my sweety ? ) in the Iran . I think you have lots of word to say and it will be really interesting .
I hope you will read ny reply to your comment .
see you tommorow and bye
kisses
Pary
Hi dear parisa!How are you?I hope every thing is ok abouy you and your children!!!and you can rest during some days off from our class and be fullenerjic to take part again in class!I don't want to loose one of the most active classmates!our class is good with all of its students and a teacher like Mahsa.hope to see you into the next class!your freind homa
Hi Dear Pary
How are you?
I miss you my active friend.
Why you don't update your blog?
I'm waiting for it please be fast.
How is your beautiful son?
I hope have a good time in your holidays.
Best wishes for my best friend.
Bahar
I feel sad when I visit your blog! no more postings? I wonder why?!?!
Hi Parisa! Hope everything is ok with your cheeky monkeys! I went to class yesterday but there were only 4 with me, nevertheless it didn’t take place and I came back. What’s your plan about class? Will you take part in? Hope to be classmate again!
See you in my celebration on Friday!
I’m waiting to see your baby’s photo on blog!
Bye, kisses
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